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Orijinalden alıntı: byob

I want to join XXX Company, because I set my goals at highest. I’m aware of your company reputation and vision. My biggest objective is join your Company and work for long years.

I study at two universities and learn three foreign languages at the same time.

I’ll graduate from both universities in 2014 summer. I’m very willing to learn languages, mechanics and systems.

I’ve got best English grades in z university, On the other hand I continue XXX language Course

You will see that I have the required skills, capabilities and experience for XXX position. I’ll work devotely if I get hired. I look forward to hearing from you.

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